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dear whomever gives a crap V2

by ~Aly-fail

dear whomever gives a crap;

      have you ever noticed
               that "imperfection"

has the words "I'm

     p
       e
          r
            f
              e
                c
                  t
                    i
                      o
                        n"


                             in it?


or have you had your head so far up your ass
  that you never bothered to?

today, for once in my goddamn life
     someone will put down their cell phone,
pay me the attention I deserve
                                          and l i s t e n

do you think i'm stupid?
i hear your "whispers" in the hall
as you down diet pills
starve yourself
and stab a finger
at ever girl you see
who has
< a b i g n o s e >
    < r o u n d t h i g h s >
         < a f l a t c h e s t >
             < a f u n c t i o n i n g b r a i n >

i might have ten extra pounds of
love,     joy       independence
     honesty    humor,     humility
              
& loyalty

[ but i would sure as hell rather have that {disgusting} problem ]

   than be missing 25 pounds of integrity, common sense, and intelligence

a person's appearance
often hints    nothing
to who the person is

 and the difference between
people like me, people like us
and people like you

is that we won't go to such lengths
of hurting         our family
our          friends
and most importantly,
      ourselves
for the acceptance of all the people
    who don't matter.


so try shoving that down your throat in front of your computer
      instead of your toothbrush in front of a nasty school toilet.

oh no, no disrespect, sweetie
just look in the mirror before you look at others

because you might not like what you see.


                                                   absolutely sincerely,
                                                                      someone who cares.
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My first inspirational piece (:
I guess submitting to groups does work, can't believe the response @_@ Thank you guys c:

Please leave constructive comments/crits? :3

EDIT: I added more to it, fixed up the formatting and the phrases that were starting to bug me, etc. Any more feedback? Suggestions on editing further? I'm trying to make the piece perfect :3

((Also, I changed the category from prose to poetry because I wasn't sure about it; I think it could fit into either, so please don't nitpick about it being placed in the wrong folder/category. I'm doing what I can here ;P))
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~savannah-kidd May 21, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
darn right. >:C

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Mood: Dumbfounded ~anime2121 Jan 6, 2011  Student Writer
WOW, Amazing

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Thank youuu ; u ;

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~anime2121 Jan 11, 2011  Student Writer
Welcome

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"for the acceptance of all the people who don't matter." - so true, I unfortunately know people like this.

I love the format, it reminds me of the novel House of Leaves.
good work :)

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Stay Strong,

Erin
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I do too c:
Thanks a lot =^^=
House of Leaves? What's it about? o:


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"When life gives you lemons, make grape juice, sit back, and let people wonder how the hell you did it..."
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its by Mark Z. Danielewsk. It is around 1000 pages long, some pages have one word, blank pages, words upside down, side ways. The novel has to do with a labyrinth in this man's house. its amazing! in my top three favorite books.

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Stay Strong,

Erin
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That sounds really cool O:
Maybe I'll read it c:


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"When life gives you lemons, make grape juice, sit back, and let people wonder how the hell you did it..."
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=plmethvin Dec 29, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
Whoa, this is, like, totally awesome! I love how you used formatting, and I've never seen cursive presented in a written work here before, if I may ask, how did you do that, and the font with the '25 pounds of integrity' thing? ^^;

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Thank you <3 ^^
It's <font face="___"> with your font of choice in the space :3
I used segoe script & georgia :3


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